Can You Proof Read This? It’s My Reading Homework?
Question by Maya: can you proof read this? it’s my reading homework?
A Day at the Beach
By Maya
Day 1
It was a lovely day in Costa Maya. Claudia was just arriving at 2:00 sharp. Guy arrived a half an hour earlier, he was on plane M-96, and the same plane famous rock star Nick Jonas was on. Claudia found Guy in there hotel room, room 14. Guy was sort of muscular, tan, and very handsome, but was some what creepy. He was busy organizing his socks, left socks, left side, right socks, and right side.
When Guy was finally finished, they went down to the beach. It was a private beach; celebrities could come and go as they please without the fear of paparazzi.
“Oh my…” Claudia said when she was intruped by a screaming Nick Jonas fan.
“That’s Nick Jonas!” the Nick fan was escorted out as Claudia went on. “He’s so much more handsome in person!”
Guy was a very jealous person. He walked past Nick. “Hey lets get a spot over here where we could be closer!” he yelled, obviously he wanted every one to know about Claudia and him.
“Sorry about him…” Claudia nervously said star struck and embarrassed. “My name is Claudia.”
“Hello…” Nick replied until Guy rudely intruped.
“Claudia!” Guy shouted.
“I better go, nice meeting you!” Claudia chirped.
“See you around.” Nick laughed a little as he replied. Oh muay caliente Claudia thought she took 3 years of Spanish, but all she new was that single phrase.
Claudia went back over to Guy. “That was extremely rude!” she looked at him waiting for a response.
“I’m sorry, but I can’t just let you talk to other guys like that!”
“Oh so I can’t talk to my dad or brother or the hotel clerk?” Claudia was mad!
“Well…I didn’t mean like that…”
“Or the sandwich guy or the life guard or…”
“Just drop it!” Guy hated it when they fought. “I don’t want to fight on vacation!”
That night, Claudia went to the Amitiza an outdoor pool. She jumped in and swam over to the bar.
“Just a water please.” Claudia was a little nervous Guy would see her and flip out again.
“Hey it’s the girl from the beach!” Nick was on a floatie shaped like a doughnut. He jumped off and ordered a drink, “Two Malibu Sunrise.”
Claudia didn’t know what that was, but she was pretty sure it had alcohol in it. “Oh I don’t drink.”
“Live a little!” Nick smiled and took a sip, “I drink all the time, and I’m fine.”
“So the rehab rumors weren’t true?” She raised her eyebrow, lifted her drink, and took a small sip. She thought it was disgusting, but put a smile on her face anyway.
“Well, your right,” he put down his drink. “I’d like water please.” He told the bar tender. “So what brings you to Costa Maya?”
“I’m on vacation.”
“With Guy?”
“We broke up.” Claudia lied. She looked at the time it was 2:00 in the morning. “I better go; I have a hula class in the morning.”
“Wait what’s your number?” Nick asked. Claudia blushed and gave it to him then walked back to her hotel.
Day 2
The next day, after her hula class, Claudia and Guy went to a café.
“Excuse me, I’m going to go use bathroom.” Claudia told Guy, and left her phone on the table. It stared to ring. Guy wanted to answer it, but it said ‘Unknown number’ on caller I.D. It rang a few more times, and then Guy picked it up on voicemail.
“Hey, it’s Nick, if you’re free tonight, I was wondering if you wanted to go out to dinner?” Nick said nervously through the phone. Guy was mad. He didn’t want competition. He wanted revenge. He put the phone in his back pocket and left.
. . .
That night, Guy went to Home Depot. He put the recite in his coat pocket. He drove back to the hotel slowly. Guy took the elevator to the 2nd floor, walked down to the hallway, and slowly opened door 14. Claudia was sleeping soundly. Guy turned to the right, walked to door 15, and slowly opened the door. He was pretty excited that it was already unlocked. Nick was sleeping. Guy pulled the covers off and pointed his gun at his heart. He thought do I really want to do this?
Day 3
Nick was found dead in the morning. He was by the edge of the bottom of a huge cliff. Detective Sanibel and Madison the Cop was there to investigate.
“Is there evidence?” Madison the Cop seriously said.
“Yes, there were rope and cinder blocks tied to his arms and legs.” Detective Sanibel replied. “And I think there were barefoot foot steps in the sand.”
“Let’s go to his hotel room.” Madison barked.
At the hotel, room 15, Sanibel found Nicks cell phone. She searched through his contacts to look for suspects.
“Hey Madison, Claudia is on here, I think she is staying right next door, I’m going to see if she is there.” Sanibel knocked on her door. “Claudia? Are you here?”
Claudia was crying. She opened the door anyway. “Hello?” she sobbed. The first thing she saw was a small chinchilla next to a tall, skinny, brunette in detective clothes.
“Hi, my name is Sanibel, and this is Aqua Powers. Could I talk to you about Nick?” Claudia shook her hand and let her in. “Where were you at 2:00 a.m.?”
“Sleeping.”
“Wa
Best answer:
Answer by arnypal
🙂 like it
there’s a few spelling mistakes, and easy grammer ones (apostrophes) but it’s great so far
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