Can You Please Rate My Rap/poem Lyrics?
Question by piece aka crossover: can you please rate my rap/poem lyrics?
“Changes”
Walking through the streets pondering if anything is gonna change
being stuck in this war based on colored rags
seeing nothing but dead bodies in black bags
hopeing people can see that this is just deranged
getting news every week that your homie just died
to me this is just a damn shame
everyone getting mad just trying to point the blame
when really were all to blame were just trying to hide and lie
so i hope people don’t think im insane
for making a song to make a simple change
hopefully im not just reaching out of my range
cause i just wanna start a chain of my own domain
but what we all need to do is come together
so we can end the war out on the street
cause we all would like to see it nice and neat
so we all need to work together to end this stormy weather
Seeing some kid in the corner doing some cocaine
thinking doing a few sniffs nothing is gonna go wrong
till next thing you know your long gone
damn my brain is just throbbing in strain
just sitting back thinking nothing but mundane
noticing that monday is the day to buy some drugs
there thinking smoking some buds is the way to be a thug
and im just trying to sit back and retain
cause i just wanna be a help to this world
trying to show that drugs is killing us all
so stop and come to me and stand tall
cause im tired of seeing everyone just curled
hopeing that my lyrics can just hit everyone in the brain
to get everyone to put the drugs away
cause im tired of seeing everyone decay
i just want everyone alive to display that this change was not in vain
still we need to make more changes and end this racial battle
going around school seeing everyone hanging out with the same race
thinking to myself that this is a damn disgrace
seeing them move around like there some big *** cattle
why cant they all realize we are the same kind
so we can all come together as the same race
instead of killing each other cause of a different colored face
y’all just need to stop and use that mind
and stop this stupid endless racial violence
seeing kids getting jumped cause of there different skin
looking at there face bruised all the way down to there chin
thinking to myself this has to be my number one assignment
to bring this racial battle to a change
and end this mindless war of mankind
so everyone can just sit together and unwind
and just live together without these dangers
“Fortune and Fame”
Growing up as children thinking its easy to find our fortune and fame
when really its just damn hard to obtain
getting ready to pop out the champagne
till that one day when everything just falls apart
trying not to stress your mind out with cocaine
so just gotta stay in the game and be smart
cause even if you grew up in poverty
doesn’t mean you have to keep on wondering
just do the right thing and keep yourself from plundering
don’t think that gangs are the only answer
cause in the future your just gonna look back at yourself blundering
cause that trouble just spreads out like a type of cancer
so don’t give up searching for your fortune and fame
and be sure not to fall in that hole of shame
and go through life with only one name
cause everyone wants to be something in life
and not just ending up as the same
so just have to fight for your fortune and fame even if you have to use a knife
hoping that one day your dream is gonna come true
thinking that selling some shrooms is gonna make it all come through
acting like thats gonna help too
when really your just acting like a fool
just relying on your so called crew
when there just treating you like a damn tool
only thing your thinking of is selling a few buds
just to make a few quick dubs
trying to be above from the rest of the scrubs
when really you just forgotten your dream of fortune
but you don’t care you just wanna hang out with all the cuh’s
and the only thing your gonna get in return is misfortune
but its not to late to change your ways
cause ain’t nothing better than looking for brighter days
and no i don’t mean that in just a good phrase
cause we need this for all the future children
were we all grow up getting praised
so get your fortune and fame for your future grandchildren
then the day comes when you receive your fortune and fame
listening out for your name
waiting for the day when all this lights up like a bright flame
sitting back thinking on everything you went through
popping out some champagne as your name gets hanged in a golden frame
and all this is only just a debut
but that doesn’t mean your done with working
cause you just don’t know what might be lurking
so don’t stop for a moment in the act of jerking
just keep on working on amazing people
and try to resist the temptation of a few cute smirkings
cause now your the hero of a few townspeople
knowing that you went through a rough road
knowing that nothing is gonna kill your mode
hoping that this will all last before it explodes
but the only thing
Best answer:
Answer by Madi
Hay there. I been writing rap lyrics for some time now, nd listen to a lot of underground hip hop. And i gotta tell ya, i really admire tha things you have ta say about life and tha hardships we face every day. Most rappers nd MC’s just spit about tha riches, bitches, and glory of tha game. But ur shit is real and i respect that. Tha only advice i have for you is: maybe try more rhythm in tha future. Try writing to instrumentals to make the words flow together. 16 bars is a pretty good beat to start with. Keep it up bruh! 🙂
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